Friday, August 14, 2009

Manas first draft

Title: Vendetta: Luckys revenge
Hi Guys
This is just my first draft and hopefully you guys will enjoy it and please comment on it so I can make sure I’m on the right track. I decided to write about my fan fiction story on one of my favourite authors Jackie Collins. Her books are very entertaining and enjoyable to read. The first book that I ever read of hers was Vendetta: Luckys revenge and I was totally hooked. I’ve read most of her novels and their pretty much based on the lifestyle of the rich and famous in Hollywood and what really goes on behind the scenes.

Donna Landsman sighs loudly and then leans back on her chair while thinking about her late husband Amos Bonnatti. He sure had a reputation as the ladies “man” but she can’t help but think if he did ever truly really love her. She remembers the first day he came to her small town in Mexico looking for a beautiful wife. He was very rich and powerful but wasn’t that great looking, but what did it matter he was wealthy and my ticket out of this dump. Still staring out the window she remembers the day he asked her to be his wife and if she would move with him to Los Angeles. It was all so real and how could I not turn him down. I was ready to get out of this lifestyle and begin my new life with Amos Bonnatti. But what she didn’t know was that he was violently abusive. Their marriage lasted 16 years until he was shot dead at his office. Although he treated her badly, deep down Donna still loved him very much. “Oh I do love you my Amos” as tears starting running down her cheeks.

“Oh Amos, I promise I will bring justice to your death, even if it means destroying that Lucky Santangelos life completely”. “I know it was her that did it, I just know it”. Donna had been thinking of a plan to bring down Lucky and she knew exactly what she had to do, and that was buying her precious Panther Studio. Lucky was the new owner of Panther Studio after the legendary movie mogul Abe Panther sold her Panthers Studio after Lucky found proof that Abe’s deceitful grandson in law running the studio was skimming big bucks every way he could. The head of production was snorting coke, and supplying $2000 a night for call girls to movie stars and V.I.Ps. and the head of distribution was smuggling drugs overseas along with Panthers legitimate productions. This was all disastrous as the company was not making enough profit from the movies they were making. When Lucky finally took control things were turning around for the better.

“I want Panther Studio now!” Donna screamed at her lawyer who was remaining calmful. “It’s not that simple Donna, do you even know how to run a studio let alone know anything about making movies”. “Does all that matter NO? “All I want is justice for my husband and that Lucky Santangelo will beg for my mercy”.

2 comments:

  1. I like the whole concept of mixing hollywood glamour with the criminal underworld. I think the character of Donna is quite fascinating, she seems like a very strong woman but at the same time still exhibits a vulnerable side to her. Why does Donna still love her abusive dead husband?

    I also would like to know why Donna is so convinced that Lucky had something to do with her husband's death. Hopefully your final draft will uncover more information and hence keep the readers in the loop.

    I Look forward to your next instalment. :)

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  2. The story line sounds really exciting and like lots will unfold in the final copy. Would have liked more of a conclusion to what happens to Lucky, so I am really looking forward to the end result.

    Really like how you have clearly portrayed the characters and they have their defining features which all fit in to the plot.

    Can't wait to find out what happens and if Lucky really deserves to be blamed for this death!

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